I’m delighted to be hosting #BlogFlash2012 – 30 Days, 30 Prompts 30 Posts.
If you’d like to jump on board, it’s not too late!
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#BlogFlash2012: Day Thirteen – Forest
I apologize for breaking my own rules on the word count today, but I think if I’ve learned anything from #BlogFlash2012 so far it’s that sometimes you need to go with the right fit not the right count. This extract from my upcoming psychological thriller Nowhere to Run seemed a great fit for today’s prompt so I chose to go with it.
The nag trekked dutifully the hilly south meadow.
As they rode, Mag’s arms and legs turned to granite and crumbled. Fear begged her to turn back, and fear urged her on. Her mama, daughter of a preacher, had taught her early to be on the lookout, for no good ever comes of not knowing.
If thou shalt not watch, sayeth the Lord, I will come on thee as a thief.
At the fringe of the woods Willis slowed the horse to a walk. As they slipped into the forest, the river bellowed and small white Mourning doves swooped and took wing.
The search party, to the fore, progressed slowly along the bank of the river, the riders swatting at the black flies, the horses switching back and forth, twenty rods east, twenty west, the boggy terrain like quicksand under their hoofs.
Across the river, an enormous gray moose tracked their progress.
Confused, the young farmhand had difficulty locating the tree. ‘It’s in close neighborhood with the river,’ the bewildered boy said. ‘Close neighborhood.’ Close.
Light beaconed through the eye of a needle. The boy pointed, nodding furiously, and reined his horse sideways, giving way to his elders. As the lead horse entered the clearing, the rider pulled up short. His shoulders sagged. Stiffening, he raised his rifle, signaling the others, and the party closed ranks.
Willis halted the nag by a white pine at the outer edge of the clearing.
Squinting, Mag watched through a breach in the cavalry wall, her heart heavy.
The child’s slight body swayed in a soft vernal wind, her skirt fused indecently to her legs, revealing the contours of her slender thighs. Her left foot was bare. Her tiny black boot lay in the dirt, the heel buried in muck, the narrow toe box pointing to Heaven.
Her name was Cornelia. She was thirteen years old . . .
Word count: 314
I like the Bible reference. No one hears quotes from the Bible without having an emotional response. Very personal and striking heavy.
I love writing for my boy, Father James. I get my inner preacher-man going.
I said at the end of July “I’m not a blogger. I don’t blog.”
http://eightysixthepoet.blogspot.com/2012/07/blog-flash-2012.html
But I might now be a blogger.
Here’s my forest piece:
http://eightysixthepoet.blogspot.com/2012/08/blog-flash-2012-august-13-forest.html
You crack me up with "I am not a blogger." I spent way too long today "picking out words with tweezers" instead of eating.
Your Forest piece was magnificent.
I think you are definitely now a blogger, Eighty Six! And I'm so glad you took part in the challenge!
Interesting story. Looks like it could be an good read.
http://adrarasdreams.blogspot.co.uk/2012/08/blogf…
Thank you so much, Elaine – that's so kind!
Very intriguing. Poor Cornelia. A wonderful description of the fear these folk are experiencing.
Here is my Day 13:
http://www.melinagillies.com/2/post/2012/08/blogf…
Thank you so much, Melina! I loved the imagery of your 'Forest' piece!
I loved your story! It was very touching.
Here is my day 13: http://christinakrieger.com/2012/08/13/blogflash-…
Thank you so much, Christina!
Hmmm, intriguing! Looks like an interesting story – you've piqued my curiosity now. Beautifully written piece, Terri.
Here's my link, I've gone a shad or two darker today! http://wp.me/p1UhOl-8d Hope you like it.
I love it, Carlie! What a great use of the prompt!
Thanks for sharing a part of your new work. I love seeing bits of what people have recently finished or have in progress.
Here is my forest bit – http://librarygirlreads.blogspot.com/2012/08/fore…
Thank you, Angela! I really enjoy the WIP pieces too. Thanks for the link!
Your piece is pretty hard hitting, and beautifully worded. Great imagery. http://thelastkrystallos.blogspot.co.uk/2012/08/b…
Thank you, Lisa! Your 'Forest' piece was very moving!
Wow. Just wow. I hope to one day produce something that intriguing.
http://runesandothersecrets.blogspot.com/2012/08/…
Thank you so much, Heidi! I loved the glimpse at your own WIP!
Your piece is very dark and mysterious. The description of finding Cornelia is harrowing. Yet I want to continue reading. excellent writing. xx
here's my offering for day 13
http://40somethingundomesticateddevil.blogspot.co…
Hope you like. xxx
Thank you so much, Lizzie! The book is a very different work from my debut, but it's exciting to work on a new story!
Beautiful words and a brilliantly tense scene! Thanks very much for sharing!
– andrea
http://word2live.wordpress.com/2012/08/13/belvoir…
Thank you so much, Andrea! I really appreciate your feedback!
Very intriguing insight to your own work. :)
Here's my link:
http://lovethebadguy.wordpress.com/2012/08/14/day…
Thank you! I love your haiku today!
Enjoyed the extract Terri.
Looking forward to Nowhere to Run. It sounds like a very different book to In Leah's Wake.
Thank you, David! There are some common themes, like family relationships, but the story itself is certainly very different!
My Blog Flash 2012 Day 13 post :)
Though a bit delayed.
http://www.jblearnstowrite.com/blog-flash-day-13-…
Thank you so much, JB! You've treated us to another cliffhanger I see!
How lovely, Terri!
My entry is here . . . I’m trying to catch up after the holiday :)
http://dreaming-of-stories.blogspot.co.uk/2012/08/blog-flash-2012-day-13.html
I am slowly getting caught up lol
http://wp.me/p2pf5s-1nc
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